准备给世界卫生组织的部门写英文信！水平有限，求指正

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原帖由 寻找活路 于 2009-8-30 23:49 发表
写的非常好，自叹不如，
"these sufferers frequently face discrimination all aspects of life and work"是否应加个from，改为"these sufferers frequently face discrimination from all aspects of life and work"

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见笑了！都是抄拼的。

在google里搜索了一下， 没有 face discrimination from 这个用法。但这里加个介词会更好理解。 face discrimination in all aspects of  这个用法有。
admission 在字典里的意思是“n.准许进(加)入，许可；入场费(卷)；承认”的意思，accept 为 “接(领,收)受；承认,同意；相信”，前者更强烈，后者也能表达出意思，为避免重复，可交叉使用。

第3个修改赞同，更具体一些。

另外，信里是不是还充实一些关于乙肝病毒携带者艰难谋生的细节。西方人看东西更在意数据，事实。“可能，大概”之类的东西他们不太信服！
还有，提醒搂住，Hepatitis B 表示乙型肝炎，没有Hepatitis B carrier 说法， 乙肝病毒携带者 为 carrier of Hepatitis B virtus, 或直接用 HBV carrier.

受治疗的鱼

楼主的感情表达得非常真挚。有的地方用词和语法给修改了一下，仅供参考。
你提供的邮箱，是不是再确认一下？他们都不是管中国事务的。只有这个好像还沾边。 总的来说楼主写得不错，希望更多的人能象你这样！
WHO Regional Office for the Western Pacific
Manila, Philippines
Peter Cordingley
[email protected]


Dear Madam/ Sir,

I was born in China in 1970s. Because of the poor medical treatment condition in China at that time, I was infected as a Hepatitis B Virus (HBV) carrier by the contaminated medical instruments.
As you know, there are 120,000,000 people who are HBV carriers in China. But you may not know that those people are discriminated because they are HBV carriers. Almost all companies in China, even the government departments, require the candidates to provide the results of their physical exams which must include HBV 5-item test (HBsAg, HBsAb, HBeAg, HBeAb, HBcAb). If you are HBsAg positive, you will lose your job. The companies will not give offer to you. Countless similar things happen every day. Even if you are lucky to get an offer, your medical privacy will be told to all of your colleagues by HR. Then, your colleagues will look at you just like a monster because they won’t accept you as a member. And they will keep distance as far as they can. They refuse to talk with you and have meals with you. You are discriminated!
According to a survey, 80% of foreign companies discriminate the HBV carriers when they recruit new members in China. However they don't do the similar thing in other countries.
The government has enacted a lot of laws to forbid discrimination regarding HBV carriers in work-place in the past few years. But because the officials of MOH refuse to cancel the HBV 5-item test, the discrimination becomes more and more serious and the situation of the carriers becomes worse and worse. We just want a job like other people. We just want to live like a human being.

Hope you can pay attention to the situation of HBV carriers in China. We call on MOH of China to cancel the HBV 5-item test when we have a pre-employment medical exam.

Best regards,

A HBV carrier of China

candyzxz

都是些高手，，，我已经放了两三年了，，很迟钝了。。。

jackylee123

世界卫生组织有中国的办事处，但我想中国的办事处估计会跟卫生部沆瀣一气，所以就想发给外国的，毕竟外面的和尚会念经嘛！