8月15日第二封英文信（附中文）发给世界卫生组织及媒体

ltdh2001

顶呀 这个怎么可以下去呢！

布衣草堂

飞奔去月球

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有什么新消息吗?

ltdh2001

战友顶起来 我认为这个帖子最有用 其他都是假的

受治疗的鱼

没有结果之前就还有希望，不要停啊。

hbver-huaweia

事先声明，本人只有勉强及格的英语四级水平，可能我提的会是一些错误的看法，大家请批评指正～～不要留面子，呵呵
       Hepatitis B discrimination in China is very serious.
我改成：Hepatitis B discrimination  is very serious　in China.
The Chinese government is planning to enact a policy to permit kids who carry Hepatitis B
我建议:carrys
Please help us to convince the government to pass this policy and other related policies!
我建议：Please help us to convince that  the government  could pass this policy and other related policies as soon as possible!

From 1990s to present,
我建议：since 90s,

in this situation 放置句末

the Hepatitis B carriers are discriminated and nearly abandoned by the whole society．建议使用被动语态　are ---were

Chinese government already realized this issue and began to modify some 建议文章句子时态保持一至．要不就have realized`````begin

Please share your professional thoughts of how to ~~~~~
建议thoughts ---opinion

You may wonder that health history should be personal privacy.
建议should be 改成is

Below are some links relevant to Hepatitis B discrimination.
建议the following代替bellow,bellow是介词，不能做主语．
An carrier  －－－a carrier
本人水平有限，英语荒废许久，很多都不记得了，知道这里有高手，但就不出手，现我出出丑，请高手伸手！！将文章写的更正式一点，觉得还是写的有点中国式英语的感觉～～呵呵

fromdesert34

carrry 好像不能加s因为从句的主语是kids。。

the Hepatitis B carriers are discriminated and nearly abandoned by the whole society．建议使用被动语态　are ---were  好像已经是被动的了吧，不用过去时吧？

xiaopao

严重支持，顶 顶 顶！！！
楼主好棒

hbver-huaweia

早说了要战友指正，终于看到出手的了，大家都尽力就好了